Before and after

Before

“To outsource some aspects of our finance transactional processing activities, we will be transitioning certain transactional activities.”*

After

As part of an outsourcing programme, we’re changing the way we pay you.   

*The original is a real life piece of writing, spotted by the Plain English Campaign. It was in a  letter from a well-known multi-national corporation to its suppliers. The re-write can be understood first time and would save calls and e mails to the person who wrote the original, asking for clarification.